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a poem i wrote but it aint my strength

June 2, 2008

the poem i wrote but poetry ain't my strength but i thought I'll give it a go enjoy

We walked together hand in hand through the darkland. We passed the crimson river which flowed like blood through the mortal veins with an eerie glow of a moon on a misty noon it did give me a fright yet she comforted me like a mother to a new born babe.

We passed where the ghouls and howl nice and slow in the bitter marsh where the Mopoke owls sing their song of woe a mist of silver light came fourth and wrapped it's self around our legs and melted around us two like liquid felt.

We quickly entered a cave that twas cold as the grave,haveith she not been there with me i would've been lost like a lonely ghost with no host.

She lead me through the twisted caverns which art havens for ravens and daemons our journey ended quickly in her black crystal palace where i twas mended and given a bed for an eternity of grateful rest which is the very gift for the sleepless dead.

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      Posted 2 months ago by Red_Crimpson

      damn dude that's awesome!!! you're really talented keep it up

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      Posted 4 months ago by magicgirl08

      ben i thought u said it was not your thing its really good

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      Posted 6 months ago by mickangel

      i like. i love to write....writing more songs now- critique these lyrics?

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      We are two yet one i breathe you in and surrender to shadows too soon erased by truthful light

      i am whole yet splintered i seal my fate on a rose petal altar too quickly consumed by mourning light

      (chorus)

      one story a riddle a mobius strip- with no questions, no answers no time to know time with you

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      Posted 7 months ago by loyalfreak94

      for poetry not being your thang that was really good i dindt know a boy could think like that

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      Mood: IN LOVVVEEEEE <3 lol and NOO!!!!!!!!!!!! SEASON 4 IS OVRRR!!!!!!! X'-[
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      Posted 7 months ago by IBELIEVENANGEL

      yea cool like descriptions and stuff but..throught it all it was awesome!

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      Posted 7 months ago by 84crowfreak

      mykind of poem very hot

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      Posted 7 months ago by briana

      UR POEM IS NICE!